You have some clever writing. All though there is only so many puns I can sit through before I get bored.
Overall you are headed the right direction. I'd say go less one liners and more observational. I think one line comics are only good if they have a huge bizarre personality.
Props though, I've wanted to try stand up but haven't had the courage yet.
Is this done in Calgary?
Pretty funny. I would suggest making more eye contact with the crowd, you seem to always be looking down or to the side, and that makes you look nervous. You're on the right track and can be the next Russel Peters if you know a lot of racist jokes.
Hey thanks for the feedback and not flaming, i come from a loose moose improv background but I've always preferred writing jokes and just started performing more often again Lates
some funny lines. IMO your routine would be alot funnier if you projected some confidence.
In my head I was laughing at some of the jokes, but most of it was lost by waiting for you to get there. That said it is most definately alot harder then it looks and that definately takes some balls to get up there and do
The nervous/non-eye contact thing is pretty established, I don't see a problem with it. There is sort of a lack of flow coming from the material being a series of observational puns, but I still laughed at a lot of it.
Not bad. not bad at all. The first segment was akward but I liked it. If you start your show as the unsure guy reading jokes off a page and then bust into the meat of it I think that would be a good gimmick.
Just bumping this with a few more vids, and also to let everyone know that our Feature Film Debut Sketch will be playing at the Calgary International Film Festival
I started doing Standup
