It's been a while since I used MLA, but first I would say don't pinpoint to paragraphs. Normally page numbers are used, and it at least used to be the case that pinpoints were omitted for unpaginated sources like websites.
My second comment is that the first one doesn't look like a paraphrase to me--that looks like it turns into a direct quote. I would try constructing a sentence which builds in a reference to the author--like "according to Travers," or some such thing. That might help you to get closer to paraphrasing the "idea" you want rather than just using his words.
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