Take this with a grain of salt as I am not an English teacher.
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Originally Posted by WesternCanadaKing
If there are any high school english teachers who post here, and have a little bit of time on their hands, I would really really really appreciate if you could just possibly read over this essay and tell me what you think. I need to get a good grade with it and I just need to know if you would give it an 80 or higher. Or just a quick skim would work too.
The play Hamlet, written in 1600 by William Shakespeare, is known as one of the greatest pieces of literature in the English language. In the play, Shakespeare develops the idea that in order to effectively achieve ones goals, a balance between planning and action is required; too much of either could result in a lack of action or unexpected results.
He does this by juxtaposing three characters who are each in similar situations: Hamlet, Laertes, and Fortinbras.
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Here, you are using the colon to describe the situation. Where the colon is used somewhat correctly, you should re-word it to reflect that you are going to list the three characters, because it implies that the following should be the situations. Know what i mean?
Shakespere juxtaposes characters who are in similar situations, and focuses on three main ones: Hamlet, Laertes, and Fortinbras.
Something along those lines.